A Better Plan #FridayFictioneers

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A Better Plan

Wanting to disappear, I curled into myself and buried my head under the soft pillow. If I made myself small enough, I could hide from the last hours of my dad’s life.
You wrapped around me, wanting to shield me from my grief.
“No more suffering,” you said but I wasn’t sure who’s suffering you meant.
“It feels like I killed him,” I confessed.
“He begged me to push him off a dock and leave him. I couldn’t do it,” you whispered.

“That’s just stupid,” I lifted my head with a soft chuckle, “God, I’m going to miss that ridiculous old cowboy.”


In control until his last breath, my father died exactly 24 hours after he told the hospice nurse, “This will all be over by tomorrow.” The story is true and I’m so glad that my husband didn’t agree to my dad’s demand. Calling hospice was exactly the right thing to do. He had a good death with my sister and I at his bedside. I couldn’t have wished for a better ending to his story. And a day doesn’t go by that I don’t miss him and his tales and his sense of humor.

For more 100 word stories sail over to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields‘ website and follow the dock to Friday Fictionners. (Oops, I guess it’s a bridge and not a dock.)

31 thoughts on “A Better Plan #FridayFictioneers

  1. Wow. This is told with love and control, devoid of any sentimentality. It’s beautiful

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  2. Loved that last line. It’s a beautiful way to grieve 🙂

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  3. What a beautiful tale. I hope when my time comes, I can die with dignity and grace–and of course– some really clever and witty parting line.
    Your Dad sounds like one hellava cool guy.

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  4. Really touching story, thanks for sharing. And well written.

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  5. A moving little story, with an uplifting finale. Nicely done Tracey.

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  6. Very sad with a lovely last line.

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  7. Dear Tracey,

    You have a real knack for telling a straight forward story that goes right to the heart. Well done.



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  8. Souch a touching, heart-warming story, even more so since it’s true. You had an amazing father. I remember earlier stories your wrote about him.

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  9. michael1148humphris

    A very touching conversation, we do miss those we loved.

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  10. This touched a nerve! I won’t go into details, but my own father had similar thoughts about speeding along what he saw as the inevitable process, then went to a fantastic hospice where he died peacefully early the second day there, after spending a last good day with my mother. After a long and full life some people are ready – hope I’m as brave!

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  11. that was lovely, touching and heartbreaking all at the same time. What a great way to remember your Dad 🙂

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  12. great first line. it couldn’t be any better than that.


  13. Beautiful story, even lovelier for being true.

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  14. It was a lovely story, Tracey. Thank you so much for sharing it. When it’s time for a parent or other relative to leave us that would be the best way. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  15. Your dad sounds like mine. I hope they are hanging out in heaven with the rest of the cool dads.

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