Next Time

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Photo credit@ Geogia Koch

Next Time

A copper tang mingled with the dockyard flotsam.
“Lotta blood. She been dead long?”
“An hour or two, hard to say for sure.”
“Cold?”
“Not really, just a little damp.”
The officer turned to face his partner; her uniform, wet and tattered, “Same MO, same perp?”
“Ya.”
“You look rode hard. How long you been chasing this asshole?”
“About two hours too long,” she said, her voice strangely shallow.
“Next time call for backup. You always gotta be a damn hero.”
“Sure, next time,” her words trailed off as her image faded to nothingness.

For more hard boiled crime fiction or nautical tales go to Friday Fictioneers hosted by the famous Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.

29 thoughts on “Next Time

  1. Gritty dialogue. Have to confess I don’t get the ending. However, I still enjoyed reading the piece. Thanks!

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  2. Oooo…a little crime drama, my favorite genre!

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  3. Love the hardboiled… I have a feeling next time is an hour or two late… alas.

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  4. Dear Tracey,

    Why do I have the hollow feeling there won’t a ghost of chance at next time? Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  5. A ghostly crime story, with realistically chilling dialogue. Well done.

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  6. Great dialogue and I could really picture the scene. Lovely twist at the end. Well done.

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  7. Sounds like she should have called for backup this time too. Nice one!

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  8. The dialogue reminded me of the Dirty Harry movies. You painted the scene well.

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  9. “…as her image faded to nothingness.” how does he react?

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  10. Loved this – a lot in 100 words and none of it straight froward. Reminds me a little of the best BBC crime series ever – River. Check out the you tube opening credits and scenes if you have a mo.

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  11. Great dialogue, but the ending confused me. It must be a ghost story, I guess.

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  12. Wow, bleak but powerful tale, Tracey.
    Quite a kick in the hee-haws.

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  13. Whoo, I guess his hairs stand on end just like mine after finishing the reading. Great mixture of crime and ghost story. The best ones have that little pinch of fantasy woven in. Great voice, Tracey.

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  14. Oh! I love the ending. Creepily good.

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