Photo credit to Jill Wisoff
Love You Long Time, Big Time
By T. Delaplain
Camille teased the Marlboro to the corner of her mouth as a puff curled up her nose. She leaned over, in practiced seduction, straightening the seam in her fishnets and displaying her generous booty.
“Must be the rain, men ain’t horny when it rains.”
“They aren’t hungry either.”
“Hey, hotdog man, you got a twenty? I got nothing but time.”
“Keep that lipstick on your own dawg, girl. Why you gotta be like that?”
“Hungry, I guess. Love you long time, big time,” she offered.
“I gotcha. You want onions?”
“Might as well, ain’t no biz. Thanks, man.”
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You got an idea to sell? Flash us a Friday Fictioneers’ corner and make your case in 100 words or less.
Tracey Delaplain, MD 
Lovely voices to this
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Thank you kindly.
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Disturbingly realistic scenario – the boredom that comes even with the most unusual jobs. As Neil said, great voices Tracey
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Thank you, you felt the same way that I did when I wrote it. The original title was, “When a Prostitute Gets Bored.”
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My pleasure. I’ve seen it first hand on a visit to Amsterdam years ago – girls dressed in lingerie, looking bored, flicking through magazines. It looked like a grim life.
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Two complete, well drawn characters in 100 words. Nicely done.
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Thanks Iain
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A nice little scene. I felt like an observer watching, watching them both. Maybe the rain will stop and the appetites return.
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Perhaps, thank you for dropping by.
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Dear Tracey,
Love the voices. Camille might not be a charmer, but your story is…big time.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you so much.
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Tough tough fight for survival in a big city.
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I can only imagine. Thank you for dropping by my corner,
Tracey
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Such well crafted characters and settings in such few words. Loved it.
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Thank you and I’m glad you stopped by,
Tracey
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I guess they’re both out of luck in that weather. At least they’ve got each other to talk to!
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Exactly, thanks Ali
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Love this Tracey. I can so hear them and picture them as old “friends” of sorts, shooting the shit while they are not busy….
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Thanks, it is easy to de-humanize people who make their living on the street. Ordinary people, making ordinary connections.
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Exactly!
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Hahaha terrific. I could really see them talking, hotdog man and hooker! Fabulous piece
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Thanks for stopping by my corner Laurie. You want mustard with that compliment?
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You have a great talent of making us look at people and things where we usually prefer to look the other way. I, too, love the voices, and the descriptions. The scene is alive.
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What a nice compliment. Thank you.
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Well, all in a day’s work, right? It’s a different world than the one I live in, in my small town. Your characters were very real.
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Yes, I think everyone’s job becomes mundane.
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Terrific story-telling, Tracey. Two great characters with distinctive voices, and a narrative that pulls us in and makes us empathise with both of them. I like the way that, without being judgmental, you equate the feeding of the two human appetites, and I suspect you, too, of symbolism; both things adding to the power of your story.
And, despite dealing with our desires at their most basic, you’ve written a tender story!
Wonderful!
Kudos!
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Thank you for the insightful comment. I’m blushing.
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I love these two. And I am intrigued that they both find the rain has a negative effect on their business. Brilliant voices and the Marlborough – perfect imagery. All very neatly crafted including the great title.
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Thank you Jilly. I have no idea if rain dampens desire but it certainly makes acting on desire less convenient. Drop by any time.
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A real picture is painted here.
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Welcome. Thank you for dropping by and commenting.
Tracey
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Love the characterisation in this, felt it was a scene from a movie, it was so authentic. It is nice of the guy to offer her some food.
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I would like to believe that she watches over him too in some way, the streets are mean.
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Oh… love it, from the scene of her adjusting the fishnets to the dialogue… could be the beginning of a beautiful friendship.
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Yes, I think so too. Maybe she’s really an undercover cop and she’ll save his life at the end of the movie. Or she could just be an ordinary working girl. But yes, it’s a start.
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I enjoyed the unlikely camaraderie of the woman and the hotdog man. I could imagine them both very clearly. The voices were perfect.
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Thank you Brenda, just two people uniting over food.
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This made me laugh.
It was supposed to, right?
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Yes, I thought it was funny. I’m glad you get me Dawn.
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Waiting for the follow up, when the sun shines. Great dialogue
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Thanks Mike, this working girl deserves a few more words. Stay tuned.
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Great interaction between these two. Brilliant dialogue, captures the mood and setting perfectly
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Thank you Michael
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